Saturday, September 7, 2013

I Remember (dverse prompt-Try to remember...)



I remember


I remember
the day you fell
from your own grace

 yielding to the world
and its dark wishes

swallowing each bitter pill
until the bottle was empty.

Lazy lids, fluttering as memories
fled, filling the room with their
quiet ghosts

I remember how empty
I felt when I realized I
would never see you again.

Saying goodbye is never easy
but that farewell is still
as bare as bone

even as the sun warms
the memory of you.

42 comments:

  1. dang. suicide is another hard memory...one that leaves us with so many questions...like how you use the swallowing of the bitter pill to tell that part of the tale...

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  2. Agh. Very sad poem. You use the physical world so well here -- in terms of the writing - describing the room, your feelings, the bare as bone, the sun warming what feels like stone. Thanks. k.

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  3. The sun never completely takes away that bitter chill. Powerful piece!

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  4. So emotive Lisa. Remembering loss, remembering how it felt when tough realizations were made are memories that live on for sure, and I can feel the wistfulness in your telling. Love the ending too.

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  5. A sad saga that has been witnessed too many times. A good revelation.

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  6. Some good-byes are harder than others. Some good-byes hurt forever. This seems like one of those.

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    1. This was definitely a hard good-bye. Thank you for commenting Mary.

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  7. How sad to fall on our own hands, swallowed empty, bare as bones ~ Really beautiful writing here ~

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  8. You deftly create the atmosphere of loss. Beautifully done.

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  9. This could be the poem I read when I remember my friend gone since '91. This is just so sad and so good.

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  10. such beautiful memories and sometimes we feel good and sometimes sad....

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  11. This is so intense and heart-breaking remarkable Lisa you are absolutely amazing

    (The new prompt is up)

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  12. A good buy to suicide... that is never complete... and still we want to treasure the bright side of the memories... very strong and sad.

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  13. How sad and tragic. I can't imagine losing someone you care about like this ... so painful. Well written, Lisa.

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  14. I remember how empty
    I felt when I realized I
    would never see you again.

    The dichotomy of loss. I know this.

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  15. "Saying goodbye is never easy
    but that farewell is still
    as bare as bone" --- that could stand alone. It's brilliant.

    Loved this!

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  16. Chilling! yes never ewasy to part ways. Lovely composition!

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  17. Very intense and I like even as the sun warms the memory of you. Still though, saying goodbye is never easy.

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  18. ... no words. Just emotion. Thanks for sharing.

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  19. A well written treatment of a tragic circumstance, but done with poise and artistry.>KB

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  20. a powerful piece of work.

    what i liked about this poem is, with this theme (suicide), it did not get overly dramatic or melancholic. one can feel the loss in those words. Thanks for sharing it.

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  21. Awesome expression on your theme here.
    Calmly quiet almost in a soothing comment.

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