Saturday, August 17, 2013

Lady Blue (MLM prompt 17 optimist, pessimist, realist)



 Lady Blue

Lady Blue
I remember you-

In the depths
of sought perfection.

I hear your silence
between the words-


Thoughts not spoken
fear holds them captive.

If you were to say them,
wouldn’t the world shudder


in the bare bone honesty
that all is not right?

 The years were not
 always kind
 and love crucified the beauty
 it was supposed to cherish.

Lady Blue
I remember you.

You  still stare
through the looking glass.

34 comments:

  1. "If you were to say them,
    wouldn’t the world shudder"...ooh this couplet and the whole piece cuts right to heart. I feel compassion for this Lady.

    Congratulations on the book! I'll be ordering one up!

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  2. So nice to hear from you Jennifer! You have always been a source of inspiration. Thanks so much!

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  3. That ending caught me ~ Fine writing Lisa ~

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  4. this is rather haunting....the stare there in the end i can see her clearly, after the crucifiction...you make us feel her there...

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  5. Hmmm, there is mystery in this poem. I thought Lady Blue was another until the very end, when it is she who is looking out the looking glass. A fascinating write, Lisa.

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  6. " Thoughts not spoken
    fear holds them captive.".. lovely way of putting it... and i agree it is rather haunting.. beautiful.

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  7. Oooh! I loved this. Yes, bare bone truth...not many would ever dare utter. This was fabulous!

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  8. This spoke to me of the courage it takes to overcome weaknesses and hardships in life, and perhaps depression which can haunt one regardless. And to stare down the demons! Beautiful poem, Lisa!

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  9. Dare, dare. In the end truth is what we have to take with us beyond the looking glass. Beautifully done and haunting.

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  10. darkly through the glass we sometimes see new light. Excellent work Lisa. Enjoyed this very much.

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  11. Lisa this is incredible I really love "Lady Blue" and "in the depths of a sought perfection" this poem feels so vulnerable, you are amazing

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  12. Lisa,

    Such profound, honest and realistic words. I think we have all encountered Lady Blue, at some point!!!
    Marvellously wonderful writing Lisa:)

    Eileen

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  13. Love crucified the beauty it was supposed to cherish ... you know, Lisa, I wonder if that's "love"? Or emotional abuse? Someone who really loves us would never hurt us that deeply. This is sad and raw, but so honest and vulnerable, well expressed. True love and especially the love we give to ourselves is healing. Have a beautiful week ahead :)

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  14. I think you're right real love would never hurt us so deeply and self love is the most healing of all. Thank you so much for your comment.

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  15. Such a beautiful piece..honest, vulnerable.

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  16. An absolute favourite. This poem has so many shades to it, and some brilliant lines. I loved it. Very well penned.

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  17. I can relate to Lady Blue's silence, unspoken thoughts, and her encountering unkind years ..........beautiful expressions

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  18. lyrical, especially how you employed couplets and then offset the quatrain near the end. ~ M

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  19. "If you were to say them/wouldn't the world shudder," a moving, powerful statement. Lady Blue in the looking glass... a telling piece, Lisa. Amy

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  20. I am so in tune with this poem as it has all that I like....lady, blue, looking glass!

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  21. Lady Blue... she must be related to The Black Dog. Menacing, they. Nicely done, Lisa.

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