Tuesday, August 13, 2013

Heaven



Heaven


Weave me a heaven
which will sustain me-

Fill my sky with cloudless blue
on those lost days when tears
cannot be held between the words.


Weave me a heaven
where I remember
you as you once were,

filled to the marrow
with hope and endless
desires no hell could extinguish.

Weave me a heaven
where breath is sacred
and when the snow falls
I am not hidden in the cold
searching for that island

surrounded by old dreams
that now awaken me in the
stillness under the moonlit sky.

29 comments:

  1. So beautiful..the repetition is so effective. love how you ended it.

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  2. I agree with Susie about the repetition. The line that really got me was Weave me a heaven/where I remember/you as you once were,

    filled to the marrow/with hope and endless /desires no hell could extinguish.

    Elegant, fulfilling to the reader. Loved this, Lisa. I've enjoyed your visits recently at SLP! Amy

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  3. I just commented but wordpress has started signing me out several times daily instead of every few days so it was deleted at least I think so. Lisa this is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read (I can think of nothing that compares). The opening stanzas were so gorgeous that I just sat there jaw hanging open rereading. Stunning! I am writing poem right now and when I took a break to visit you I thought to myself damn why can't write like this! I don't think you realize how talented you are, I really look up to you you are amazing =)

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    1. Thank you so much! I feel the same about your work. Can't wait to read your book.

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    2. =) I can't wait for it to be made preferably by magic lol

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  4. This is just beautiful, Lisa. I would like this kind of heaven too!...and then to be awakened under the moonlit sky. Wow, perfect.

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  5. This is gorgeous. I especially like the 5th stanza. Weave is one of my favorite poetic words...

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  6. So lyrical and romantic. The repetition is mesmerizing.

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  7. Really wonderful poem Lisa, has that feel good feeling while you are reading it. Really like the last stanza.

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  8. Beautiful and magical! I love the refrain, mesmerizing. Thank you for joining my blog :)

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    1. Thank you for your comment and for joining my blog as well.

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  9. ...composed & soothing to read & has strong impact to heart & soul... it has this actually a classy feel that when i finished reading it i thought suddenly of Neruda & how your words resembled a bit to his writing of sad love notes... ah, magical...& lovely... lovely... lovely... enjoyed it... smiles...

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    1. Thank you kelvin, what a lovely compliment!

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  10. So gorgeous Lisa--expansive and calming to read!

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  11. This is beautiful writing Lisa, filled with sadness and longing and a touch of hope.

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  12. "weave me a heave" beautiful refrain ~ This is one I wish I had written ~

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  13. I love "weave me a heaven."

    Another nice one ... enjoyed it.

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