Dark Moon
By
Lisa A.Williams
Beneath the Dark Moon
holding power,
my father’s steel
cold fear
hung heavy
between us,
as he lay dying -
in the
heat swelled 66 New
Moon,
one day from
independence,
sweating out life’s
poisons
in a shaded room
seeking forgiveness
for old “sins” still
haunting
his opiate dreams.
Trying to let go
fighting to stay,
lost –
Wishing on a
salvation
he never believed in-
and detachment sat
nearby
never shedding a
tear.
What a strong poem this is, Lisa. I could really feel the atmosphere in this poem. Dying...waiting for the cure...I feel this in my gut. And at that moment, don't we all hope that we have forgiveness, and perhaps (if we don't already) find some kind of faith.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, Mary. Losing my father was a terribly difficult experience and this was a hard poem to write. I agree that when that time comes, we hope that we are forgiven and find some kind of faith even if we didn't have it before.
DeleteSweating out life's poisons... what a strong phrase whose truth seeps through this powerful piece.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kim, always look forward to your comments.
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seeking forgiveness
This is great writing, very emotional and moving. Well done
So appreciate your comment.
DeleteYes, detachment in his difficult but necessary, especially when someone is coming off of mind-altering chemicals.
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting, Laurie.
DeleteGoodness...your strong words reverberate throughout every line and make this such a powerful piece, Lisa.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Panchali.
DeleteI grabbed onto the life float of detachment you threw out here under the new moon.
ReplyDeleteThank you for stopping by Libby, always appreciate your comments.
DeleteWhat a scene you paint here, and then slam! that ending--very powerful piece. Sad, but lovely.
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DeleteI think this may have been the first piece of yours I read (all those months ago)...and the reason I instantly loved your work.
ReplyDeleteIt has been awhile. I remember the first time I read your poetry, needless to say I was instantly a fan. Your comments always are appreciated and are a great source of inspiration to keep writing.
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DeleteThis is a harrowing, honest portrait of a man kicking it. My mom went cold turkey from 40 years of alcohol at age 60. The idea of detachment not far away (lest one should say, "This is no fun, let's get back to work!") is right on the money.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by my blog and commenting... really appreciated your words. Peace, Amy
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Exquisite /brilliant and personally resonant / lush language for the most brutal of life's experiences - a wonderful tribute / again brilliant writing
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!
ReplyDeleteSuch an honest, painful piece. I know it was heartbreaking to watch thus the detachment. Brilliant, powerful piece!
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